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DeliaM Colonist

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Posted: Tue Apr 29, 2008 5:03 pm Post subject: |
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Jeanne,
Sometimes short and simple are the best poems. Your meaning can get lost in all the eloquent prose. |
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cale Citizen
Joined: 15 Apr 2008 Posts: 134 Location: Illinois
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Posted: Tue Apr 29, 2008 7:21 pm Post subject: |
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| Jeanne, I'll make you a deal, you share a peom or 2 and I'll post the prologue of one of my books. Sound OK? |
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CarolASpradling Site Admin

Joined: 10 Apr 2008 Posts: 484 Location: Florida
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Posted: Tue Apr 29, 2008 7:23 pm Post subject: |
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Cale will post a prologue? Jeanne! Do it!!!!! _________________ Carol
www.CarolASpradling.com |
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Jeanne Colonist

Joined: 13 Apr 2008 Posts: 394 Location: Indianapolis, Indiana
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Posted: Tue Apr 29, 2008 8:49 pm Post subject: |
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Gosh, been busy here. I looked at my poems the other day and I don't know if I'm ready to reveal them. They are horrid and all of you would be so kind as to say they are nice poems. I wouldn't want to make liars out of any of you. Blackmail is good Cale. I'm afraid all of you would laugh at me being that all of you have talent and I certainly do not. But how can one laugh at one's feelings, I guess. Let me muster the courage. _________________ Don't cry if you have lost the sun. The tears won't permit you to see the stars. |
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cale Citizen
Joined: 15 Apr 2008 Posts: 134 Location: Illinois
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Posted: Tue Apr 29, 2008 9:33 pm Post subject: |
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| Not one of us would laugh. I don't believe in giving someone a negative criticism that's just cruel, but I don't believe in telling someone their stuff's excellent when it needs some finishing touches. I remember that awesome poem your son wrote, he had to get that talent from somewhere. |
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Jeanne Colonist

Joined: 13 Apr 2008 Posts: 394 Location: Indianapolis, Indiana
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Posted: Tue Apr 29, 2008 9:45 pm Post subject: |
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Well I think that he did not get it from me. He is just a thinker, like I. And he's just only 15 and he can write something that wonderful. At least I thought it was wonderful but I'm his mom. I think what I like most from his poem is that he has such a beautiful heart and he believes in romance. Don't get me wrong, Jared is a great kid as well but he doesn't talk much to me. I never know what is in his heart but James lets me in his. _________________ Don't cry if you have lost the sun. The tears won't permit you to see the stars. |
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brony1 Citizen
Joined: 11 May 2008 Posts: 159
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Posted: Mon May 12, 2008 12:51 pm Post subject: |
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I dont like the sex scenes to be to full on. I recently read the first of the Bastion Club and found I skipped through the love scenes. I also felt she gets them into bed a bit quick as well. I like the KEW way of developing the tension that keeps you inthralled.
I havent done a lot of poetry over the years butI wrote one a few years ago so thought i would share it.
I am!
Who I am!
I am who I be!
A flowing mane I have
For you to see!
I roar like a lion!
I'm LEO
Thats me! |
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